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I'm still adding events to the timeline & cleaning, but this should be considered usable, for the most part.  I didn't get any time to work on it yesterday & almost none today, and now I have to stop to sleep again. :(  Better luck tomorrow, I guess.  Oh & thanks for the quick feedback about the epic; I also prefer the short version. [[User:Dabe|Dabe]] 05:58, 16 March 2007 (CET)
"The once grand human race, owner of big cities and magnificent inventions, has now become a race divided in small establishments and towns and loads of hunters that seek adventure for a living, but reunited again."


Irving Rivas:
We could really do without little amendments such as these. Not only does this line sound terrible, but it refers to "the once grand human race".. humans are one race amongst many in a family of creatures called "man" .. please do not refer to "the human race" when attempting to reference all of the people in the world.
 
As you are working in this I didn't want to make a quick edition without making a clear notification. In the first paragraph, it reads: "Many ages ago" but in the third one, it reads "Many generations have passed". There's a time incoherence, 'cause many ages makes you think of a couple of centuries, perhaps  thousands of years, whereas many generations make you think of couple decades.

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"The once grand human race, owner of big cities and magnificent inventions, has now become a race divided in small establishments and towns and loads of hunters that seek adventure for a living, but reunited again."

We could really do without little amendments such as these. Not only does this line sound terrible, but it refers to "the once grand human race".. humans are one race amongst many in a family of creatures called "man" .. please do not refer to "the human race" when attempting to reference all of the people in the world.

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